学生作文：

　　The picture shows me that a mother bird in a nest is watching her baby flying away .

　　The baby birds stands for young people like us who only care about their own life and sledom pay attention to their parents .The mother bird symbolizes those old people like our parents who live with themselves at home when their baby grow up and leave out of home.

　　It is reminds me of my parents .Although the life live out of home is more freedom ,yet we should go home often to look after our parents, so that not make them feel lonely .in other words we should ready to bring them with happiness when they are old.

　　点评：此篇文章开篇描述图画要素内容，并且在主体段落中写出了图画的正确含义，基本满足了开放作文的考查要点，但是结构还是略显呆板。如果能将首段描图和二段阐述角色代表含义的部分整合在一起，则首段内容可以显得丰富些。更重要的是这样一来就可以在行文上做好铺垫。

　　修改如下：The picture shows me that a mother bird in a nest is watching her baby flying away ，which stands for parents who look forward to their children coming back safe and sound.

　　另外，like为动词，含义为“喜欢”;be like sb.为介词，含义为“像……一样”。还有诸如It is reminds me等双谓语的句子都是中学生根深蒂固的错误。所以本篇文章若要拿更高的分数，则必须在用词准确上下功夫。